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lucathiaTitle: Bittersweet Sweetness Part 13
Fandom: The Legend of Sun Knight
Words: 1,925
Summary: Instead of receiving a brooch that dresses him in an assassin's clothes, Sun receives a trinket that switches his consciousness around with Judgment's. Now, Judgment must find out the mystery behind the Death Knight in Sun's stead. Problem is, imitating Sun's poor swordsmanship is no easy feat, and who knew what Sun was doing with Judgment's body in the meantime? Alternate telling of the end of volume 1 of the novels.
Notes: Yup, I've slowed down with this fic. I thought I'd be able to finish it last month... complete miscalculation. Still quite a few more parts to go! Less than 400 words from 20k now. *watches each part grow out of hand*
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Part 13 - Judgment
When I woke up the next day, I almost didn't remember where I was. My limbs felt weak as I propped myself up, golden hair spilling over my shoulders, reminding me of all that had happened yesterday. I pulled myself out of bed to stare into the mirror.
The reflection that greeted me couldn't be more different than what I usually saw in the mirror. Instead of somber black hair and dark eyes, I now had bright golden hair and blue eyes. I tried a smile, the expression not at all unusual on Sun's face, but there was something off about my smile. It was too hesitant, too small. I widened my smile, cheeks twitching at the forced smile.
This is going to take some time to get used to, I thought as I brought my hands up to pull at my face so that my smile wouldn't lapse back into a frown. Sun's skin felt smooth and soft under my hands, but that was no surprise. I shuddered when I recalled the long skin-whitening process I had experienced yesterday.
My hands still smelled like lavender.
After refreshing myself, changing, and spending much too long trying to comb Sun's hair, I was as ready as I could be to face the day as the graceful and perfect Sun Knight. My mind was telling me I should have woken up an hour ago to attend a meeting I would never have missed if I had been myself, but as I was Sun, I forced myself to take my time making sure I was healed enough to be up and about. The extra sleep had been helpful and extra time wouldn't hurt.
Sun was still on vacation for successfully stopping the king from raising taxes, so that meant I was free from his duties and could use his time as I wished. I headed out of his room to look for his platoon as I needed to borrow one of them to accomplish my next task.
As I searched for the Sun Knight Platoon, I came across Storm in one of the corridors. He must have skipped the meeting much like what I was doing. Like usual, he was carrying a large stack of documents. I recalled that Storm had been given time off too, but he didn't look like he'd been on vacation at all with the dark circles under his eyes.
Grisia and I had both agreed that Storm was the best person to approach for information on nobility with a hobby of torturing others. Storm often dealt with aristocrats and noblemen, and he often played the role of diplomat, so he knew their secrets even better than I did. I'd calmly told Grisia, however, that I'd already approached Storm when Grisia had still been in bed after fainting from blood loss. I had already drawn up a list of suspects as well. That had made Grisia pout once again.
I was afraid that I was slowly getting used to seeing that expression on my face.
Although I already had my list of suspects, that didn't mean I had nothing to ask Storm about. Storm wasn't just familiar with nobility. He was familiar with all sorts of gossip, and he also knew the most people out of us all.
"Brother Storm," I opened my mouth to say, though I hadn't yet formulated the next part of my sentence.
"Stop," Storm said immediately, a frazzled look coming over his face. He looked like he really didn't want to talk with me, something I'd never experienced before, not to this degree, though perhaps he merely reined in his expressions in front of "Judgment" more. I had a feeling it was just Grisia who made Storm react this way though. "Please speak plainly."
I was entirely happy to comply.
"Do you know of Roland?" I asked. Grisia hadn't known anything about what happened to Roland after the selection for the next Sun Knight, but I felt it was relevant to our investigation. Roland had to have been close enough to our suspects for him to have been targeted by them. That meant he had a connection with nobility or perhaps even with royalty.
Storm thought for a moment before replying. "Yes, he was a promising royal knight captain, with around the same level of popularity as Elijah."
A royal knight captain...
He gave me a look. "Why are you asking?"
I filled him in on the identity of the Death Lord and told him my suspicions.
"The king has summoned you," Storm said after my explanation, his frazzled look transforming into chagrin. "I'll accompany you."
I nodded, knowing that Storm would not be able to leave this matter unturned. He'd want to know everything, and he would dig deep into the matter now that he knew what I knew.
"Before we visit the king, I need to speak with my platoon," I told him. Storm nodded and left to do a quick investigation into Roland's background. I would meet him in front of the palace entrance once I visited the Sun Knight Platoon. As he left, I thought I heard him say that "Sun" felt like an entirely different person today, strangely dependable and easy to understand...
That's because I am a different person...
At least I saved Storm from a headache.
I found the Sun Knight Platoon outside, diligently jogging around the entire perimeter of the city. Sun's vice captain was at the front of the group, barking commands and yelling for the rest to keep with him. It wasn't an unfamiliar sight, as I often saw them jogging in the mornings during times when I trained with my platoon and didn't have meetings to attend. Sometimes, I wondered if Grisia even knew how much his platoon trained, as I didn't recall ever seeing Sun run with his platoon within the city walls.
I was tempted to jog up to them and run with them -- it was what I would have done with my platoon -- but I stopped myself. Grisia has never done that before, I reminded myself. Starting now would be blatantly out of character.
That didn't mean I couldn't get him started, but there was also my injury to consider. Sleep had done wonders, but there was still a strange pain around the area of my stomach. I settled to wait where I stood for the Sun Knight Platoon to make their way around once again.
"Is that the Captain?" I heard someone gasp from the far right.
"Stop joking!" another person exclaimed. "That's such a lie!"
"Yeah! The Captain never supervises us. Don't think you can trick us!"
I turned before they could dig themselves deeper. Everyone immediately shut up.
"Captain?" Adair asked for the sake of the rest of the platoon. Everyone else had been shocked or frightened speechless.
"Yes?" I replied, widening my smile as I had practiced. I tried to organize my thoughts so that I could imitate Sun's speech even though it would be one of the most painful things I ever had to do. Although Grisia and I had once thought we would have done well in each other's positions, I was glad to leave the fancy talk to Grisia so that I could tend to matters without having to speak nonsense.
I heard someone squeak before a bunch of them started exclaiming that they weren't slacking off, that they had run seven rounds around the city already and were now on their last round. I even heard someone thank the God of Light that they hadn't decided to skip out on a round even though they had joked about it because they didn't think their Captain would ever find out.
I wondered if these sun knights had always been like this, or if Grisia's personality had warped them somehow.
When I raised my hand, all of them fell silent. I surveyed the faces in front of me, eyes landing on one particular sun knight who had brown hair and was the right height. I beckoned him forward. He stared at me, eyes large.
One of the knights near him started sniffing. "I'm honored to have known you, Ed," he said.
"Go forth proudly!" another knight called out.
No one in my platoon would have dared spoken out like that. I knew Sun often let out his true personality in front of his platoon, but imitating that would be a great deal more trouble than imitating his fake façade. I considered my options. Should I glare at them? Or warn them verbally? I would rather not speak out before I needed to.
When everything fails, depend on Adair.
I gave Adair a reproachful look.
Adair immediately turned around and yelled for everyone to shut up.
Well, that worked.
"Adair," I began, mentally reciting what I was about to say. I'd taken a lot of time to craft this sentence. "Sun wonders if any of you have formed beautiful friendships with the royal knights from the palace thanks to the generosity of the God of Light."
He nodded slowly. I wasn't at all sure what was coming out of my mouth or if anyone could understand me, but I continued speaking.
"Their clothes are exquisite, formed from the finest material under His benevolence, and would surely make Ed look dashing."
I had to praise Adair for not reacting to my strange request even while the rest of the platoon gasped when Ed's name left my lips. All of them looked at Ed with pity. It was strikingly similar to how people looked at criminals about to face judgment from me, and Ed himself looked just like the criminals I judged -- like he was about to walk into a situation where he'd rather die. Adair turned towards a sun knight I didn't recognize and told him to go look for Elijah to borrow a royal knight uniform. That was the second time I'd heard Elijah's name mentioned within a single day. After that, I had Adair send the rest of the platoon back on their run. To Ed who had been left behind, I instructed him to practice acting suspiciously.
"What?" he asked me in confusion.
"Practice," I replied. "So you know what to do later." I'd already used up all my concentration on trying to speak two sentences in Sun's elaborate speech patterns, so I resorted to speaking plainly. I thought it had been bad to be on the receiving end of Sun's speech, but being on the other end was even more troublesome. It was much too much nonsense and wasted words.
As I watched Ed dart his eyes around furtively, Adair came over to my side.
"Adair, anything to report about Jacques?" I asked.
Even though Adair probably felt something off about me, it would take a leap of faith for him to consider I wasn't Sun. As I expected of him, he didn't question me but kept his observations to himself, as I wasn't entirely out of character even though I would never be able to completely imitate Sun. I wondered if I would be able to push it and arrange to spar with Adair, but he already suspected me enough.
"None, Captain. He stayed home all night."
I nodded. That was what I had expected, but I still desired to confirm my suspicions. The king's summons was actually a golden opportunity, for at least two of my suspects would be present.
"Ed, you will be coming with me when I visit the king."
-----
to be continued
*coughs* Sun and Judgment bathing pics, manhua style. (also a cute Storm in the first pic!) Haha, seeing these made me go, "oh right, they probably don't have showers" so I changed my wording in the previous Judgment section to "bathing". I debated about the phrase "like a running faucet" since I'm not sure if they have faucets, but ehhh, I liked the phrase so I kept it...
Yu Wo had these posted in her plurk, but she reposted them here as an apology that manhua v3 will be delayed a little (something wrong with the barcode).
Sun's pic says, "A guy bathing is nothing to look at!"
Judgment's pic says, "Assassin?"
Next Part
Fandom: The Legend of Sun Knight
Words: 1,925
Summary: Instead of receiving a brooch that dresses him in an assassin's clothes, Sun receives a trinket that switches his consciousness around with Judgment's. Now, Judgment must find out the mystery behind the Death Knight in Sun's stead. Problem is, imitating Sun's poor swordsmanship is no easy feat, and who knew what Sun was doing with Judgment's body in the meantime? Alternate telling of the end of volume 1 of the novels.
Notes: Yup, I've slowed down with this fic. I thought I'd be able to finish it last month... complete miscalculation. Still quite a few more parts to go! Less than 400 words from 20k now. *watches each part grow out of hand*
Previous Part
Part 13 - Judgment
When I woke up the next day, I almost didn't remember where I was. My limbs felt weak as I propped myself up, golden hair spilling over my shoulders, reminding me of all that had happened yesterday. I pulled myself out of bed to stare into the mirror.
The reflection that greeted me couldn't be more different than what I usually saw in the mirror. Instead of somber black hair and dark eyes, I now had bright golden hair and blue eyes. I tried a smile, the expression not at all unusual on Sun's face, but there was something off about my smile. It was too hesitant, too small. I widened my smile, cheeks twitching at the forced smile.
This is going to take some time to get used to, I thought as I brought my hands up to pull at my face so that my smile wouldn't lapse back into a frown. Sun's skin felt smooth and soft under my hands, but that was no surprise. I shuddered when I recalled the long skin-whitening process I had experienced yesterday.
My hands still smelled like lavender.
After refreshing myself, changing, and spending much too long trying to comb Sun's hair, I was as ready as I could be to face the day as the graceful and perfect Sun Knight. My mind was telling me I should have woken up an hour ago to attend a meeting I would never have missed if I had been myself, but as I was Sun, I forced myself to take my time making sure I was healed enough to be up and about. The extra sleep had been helpful and extra time wouldn't hurt.
Sun was still on vacation for successfully stopping the king from raising taxes, so that meant I was free from his duties and could use his time as I wished. I headed out of his room to look for his platoon as I needed to borrow one of them to accomplish my next task.
As I searched for the Sun Knight Platoon, I came across Storm in one of the corridors. He must have skipped the meeting much like what I was doing. Like usual, he was carrying a large stack of documents. I recalled that Storm had been given time off too, but he didn't look like he'd been on vacation at all with the dark circles under his eyes.
Grisia and I had both agreed that Storm was the best person to approach for information on nobility with a hobby of torturing others. Storm often dealt with aristocrats and noblemen, and he often played the role of diplomat, so he knew their secrets even better than I did. I'd calmly told Grisia, however, that I'd already approached Storm when Grisia had still been in bed after fainting from blood loss. I had already drawn up a list of suspects as well. That had made Grisia pout once again.
I was afraid that I was slowly getting used to seeing that expression on my face.
Although I already had my list of suspects, that didn't mean I had nothing to ask Storm about. Storm wasn't just familiar with nobility. He was familiar with all sorts of gossip, and he also knew the most people out of us all.
"Brother Storm," I opened my mouth to say, though I hadn't yet formulated the next part of my sentence.
"Stop," Storm said immediately, a frazzled look coming over his face. He looked like he really didn't want to talk with me, something I'd never experienced before, not to this degree, though perhaps he merely reined in his expressions in front of "Judgment" more. I had a feeling it was just Grisia who made Storm react this way though. "Please speak plainly."
I was entirely happy to comply.
"Do you know of Roland?" I asked. Grisia hadn't known anything about what happened to Roland after the selection for the next Sun Knight, but I felt it was relevant to our investigation. Roland had to have been close enough to our suspects for him to have been targeted by them. That meant he had a connection with nobility or perhaps even with royalty.
Storm thought for a moment before replying. "Yes, he was a promising royal knight captain, with around the same level of popularity as Elijah."
A royal knight captain...
He gave me a look. "Why are you asking?"
I filled him in on the identity of the Death Lord and told him my suspicions.
"The king has summoned you," Storm said after my explanation, his frazzled look transforming into chagrin. "I'll accompany you."
I nodded, knowing that Storm would not be able to leave this matter unturned. He'd want to know everything, and he would dig deep into the matter now that he knew what I knew.
"Before we visit the king, I need to speak with my platoon," I told him. Storm nodded and left to do a quick investigation into Roland's background. I would meet him in front of the palace entrance once I visited the Sun Knight Platoon. As he left, I thought I heard him say that "Sun" felt like an entirely different person today, strangely dependable and easy to understand...
That's because I am a different person...
At least I saved Storm from a headache.
I found the Sun Knight Platoon outside, diligently jogging around the entire perimeter of the city. Sun's vice captain was at the front of the group, barking commands and yelling for the rest to keep with him. It wasn't an unfamiliar sight, as I often saw them jogging in the mornings during times when I trained with my platoon and didn't have meetings to attend. Sometimes, I wondered if Grisia even knew how much his platoon trained, as I didn't recall ever seeing Sun run with his platoon within the city walls.
I was tempted to jog up to them and run with them -- it was what I would have done with my platoon -- but I stopped myself. Grisia has never done that before, I reminded myself. Starting now would be blatantly out of character.
That didn't mean I couldn't get him started, but there was also my injury to consider. Sleep had done wonders, but there was still a strange pain around the area of my stomach. I settled to wait where I stood for the Sun Knight Platoon to make their way around once again.
"Is that the Captain?" I heard someone gasp from the far right.
"Stop joking!" another person exclaimed. "That's such a lie!"
"Yeah! The Captain never supervises us. Don't think you can trick us!"
I turned before they could dig themselves deeper. Everyone immediately shut up.
"Captain?" Adair asked for the sake of the rest of the platoon. Everyone else had been shocked or frightened speechless.
"Yes?" I replied, widening my smile as I had practiced. I tried to organize my thoughts so that I could imitate Sun's speech even though it would be one of the most painful things I ever had to do. Although Grisia and I had once thought we would have done well in each other's positions, I was glad to leave the fancy talk to Grisia so that I could tend to matters without having to speak nonsense.
I heard someone squeak before a bunch of them started exclaiming that they weren't slacking off, that they had run seven rounds around the city already and were now on their last round. I even heard someone thank the God of Light that they hadn't decided to skip out on a round even though they had joked about it because they didn't think their Captain would ever find out.
I wondered if these sun knights had always been like this, or if Grisia's personality had warped them somehow.
When I raised my hand, all of them fell silent. I surveyed the faces in front of me, eyes landing on one particular sun knight who had brown hair and was the right height. I beckoned him forward. He stared at me, eyes large.
One of the knights near him started sniffing. "I'm honored to have known you, Ed," he said.
"Go forth proudly!" another knight called out.
No one in my platoon would have dared spoken out like that. I knew Sun often let out his true personality in front of his platoon, but imitating that would be a great deal more trouble than imitating his fake façade. I considered my options. Should I glare at them? Or warn them verbally? I would rather not speak out before I needed to.
When everything fails, depend on Adair.
I gave Adair a reproachful look.
Adair immediately turned around and yelled for everyone to shut up.
Well, that worked.
"Adair," I began, mentally reciting what I was about to say. I'd taken a lot of time to craft this sentence. "Sun wonders if any of you have formed beautiful friendships with the royal knights from the palace thanks to the generosity of the God of Light."
He nodded slowly. I wasn't at all sure what was coming out of my mouth or if anyone could understand me, but I continued speaking.
"Their clothes are exquisite, formed from the finest material under His benevolence, and would surely make Ed look dashing."
I had to praise Adair for not reacting to my strange request even while the rest of the platoon gasped when Ed's name left my lips. All of them looked at Ed with pity. It was strikingly similar to how people looked at criminals about to face judgment from me, and Ed himself looked just like the criminals I judged -- like he was about to walk into a situation where he'd rather die. Adair turned towards a sun knight I didn't recognize and told him to go look for Elijah to borrow a royal knight uniform. That was the second time I'd heard Elijah's name mentioned within a single day. After that, I had Adair send the rest of the platoon back on their run. To Ed who had been left behind, I instructed him to practice acting suspiciously.
"What?" he asked me in confusion.
"Practice," I replied. "So you know what to do later." I'd already used up all my concentration on trying to speak two sentences in Sun's elaborate speech patterns, so I resorted to speaking plainly. I thought it had been bad to be on the receiving end of Sun's speech, but being on the other end was even more troublesome. It was much too much nonsense and wasted words.
As I watched Ed dart his eyes around furtively, Adair came over to my side.
"Adair, anything to report about Jacques?" I asked.
Even though Adair probably felt something off about me, it would take a leap of faith for him to consider I wasn't Sun. As I expected of him, he didn't question me but kept his observations to himself, as I wasn't entirely out of character even though I would never be able to completely imitate Sun. I wondered if I would be able to push it and arrange to spar with Adair, but he already suspected me enough.
"None, Captain. He stayed home all night."
I nodded. That was what I had expected, but I still desired to confirm my suspicions. The king's summons was actually a golden opportunity, for at least two of my suspects would be present.
"Ed, you will be coming with me when I visit the king."
-----
to be continued
*coughs* Sun and Judgment bathing pics, manhua style. (also a cute Storm in the first pic!) Haha, seeing these made me go, "oh right, they probably don't have showers" so I changed my wording in the previous Judgment section to "bathing". I debated about the phrase "like a running faucet" since I'm not sure if they have faucets, but ehhh, I liked the phrase so I kept it...
Yu Wo had these posted in her plurk, but she reposted them here as an apology that manhua v3 will be delayed a little (something wrong with the barcode).
Sun's pic says, "A guy bathing is nothing to look at!"
Judgment's pic says, "Assassin?"
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Date: 2011-10-05 11:39 am (UTC)Awwwwww!
"I thought as I brought my hands up to pull at my face so that my smile wouldn't lapse back into a frown."
XDD That'll look weird if you do that all the time!
"spending much too long trying to comb Sun's hair,"
XDDD Noooo, tangles!
"I headed out of his room to look for his platoon as I needed to borrow one of them to accomplish my next task."
:D Adair?
" I came across Storm in one of the corridors."
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!! :D :D
"but he didn't look like he was on vacation at all."
Haha, yep, sounds like him. XDD Hmmmm~ Will Judgement remember to talk in the right way in time? :D
"I was afraid that I was slowly getting used to seeing that expression on my face."
XDDDD! Just so long as no-one else sees it!
" He looked like he really didn't want to talk with me, something I'd never experienced before, not to this degree, though perhaps he merely reined in his expressions in front of "Judgment" more."
*FLAILS* D'AAAAAAAAAAAWWWW!!
""Yes, he was a promising royal knight, with around the same level of popularity as Elijah."
Eeeeee, Elijah! :D :D!! (Maybe add that Roland was a captain?)
" He'd want to know everything, and he would dig deep into the matter now that he knew what I knew."
Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! :D
"I found the Sun Knight Platoon outside, diligently jogging around the entire perimeter of the city. "
XDDD Aw.
"but there was still a strange pain around the area of my stomach."
Hmmmmmmmm. Oh really...? >D
"Although Grisia and I had once thought we would have done well in each other's positions, I was glad to leave the fancy talk to Grisia so that I could tend to matters without having to speak nonsense."
XDD Hee!
"I wondered if these sun knights had always been like this, or if Grisia's personality had warped them somehow."
I'd go with option b. :P Or c: a bit of both.
"One of the knights near him started sniffing. "I'm honored to have known you, Ed," he said.
"Go forth proudly!" another knight called out."
*dies laughing*
""Sun wonders if any of you have formed beautiful friendships with the royal knights from the palace thanks to the generosity of the God of Light."
*sneeeerk* Judgement, you kinda fail. XDDDD
"I wasn't at all sure what was coming out of my mouth or if anyone could understand me, but I continued speaking."
XDD
" even while the rest of the platoon gasped when Ed's name left my lips. All of them looked at Ed with pity. It was strikingly similar to how people looked at criminals about to face judgment from me, and Ed himself looked just like the criminals I judged"
*dies laughing* *Dies laughing* *dies laughing at the entire paragraph* omgggggggolllllll!
"To Ed who had been left behind, I instructed him to practice acting suspiciously."
*splutter* Oh, of course!! Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!
*_________* We're seeing this part! Awesome awesome awesome!
XDDD Sun looks really feminine here too. I think it's his eyes. And that his hair's tied up. And he's blushing. XD;; (Duckie!)
Haha, who would try to kill Judgement?!
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Date: 2011-10-05 11:52 pm (UTC)"spending much too long trying to comb Sun's hair,"
XDDD Noooo, tangles!
And then Judgment chops it off. XDDD But nah, Sun would never forgive him if he did that...
I wasn't planning on having Storm appear until later, but this order of events makes a little more sense. *it was why this part grew a lot once again, since I had Judgment find the Sun Knight Platoon right away at first, but then I had to insert Storm's scene...*
Eeeeee, Elijah! :D :D!! (Maybe add that Roland was a captain?)
Oh right, maybe Storm should have mentioned the captain part. XD;;
"but there was still a strange pain around the area of my stomach."
Hmmmmmmmm. Oh really...? >D
/being super obvious
I'd go with option b. :P Or c: a bit of both.
I think it must be a bit of both. XD; I would think they'd all have been nice, upstanding citizens... but after being led by Grisia... they'd... restrain themselves less? XD;
*dies laughing* *Dies laughing* *dies laughing at the entire paragraph* omgggggggolllllll!
XDDD
Hehe, the dressing up one of the knights part was the 4th bullet point on my list. *nods* Let's see if I can wrap this story up in a believable way... I seemed to have created a mess that is just as messy or even messier than the original. XDD;;
Sun really does look very feminine in the drawing. XD;;; And there's a duckie! Haha, Judgment brought his sword with him...
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Date: 2011-10-07 04:50 am (UTC)And then Sun would kill him. Or Neo would. XDDD;;;
"being super obvious"
Is not. :P
"I think it must be a bit of both. XD; I would think they'd all have been nice, upstanding citizens... but after being led by Grisia... they'd... restrain themselves less? XD;"
We must be good people for the God of Light!
...
...This is our Sun Knight...? And he doesn't really care what we do? O-oh, okay.
"Hehe, the dressing up one of the knights part was the 4th bullet point on my list. *nods* Let's see if I can wrap this story up in a believable way... I seemed to have created a mess that is just as messy or even messier than the original. XDD;;"
Eeeeeeeeeeeee. How many bullet points do you have left?
Can't wait to see what happens next!
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Date: 2011-10-07 05:58 am (UTC)"being super obvious"
Is not. :P
Maybe Judgment is just hungry. XDDD
We must be good people for the God of Light!
...
...This is our Sun Knight...? And he doesn't really care what we do? O-oh, okay.
LOL!!
Uhhh, I have 4 bullet points left. Though that doesn't include the conclusion. XD; (Also, the bullet point "Roland & Blaze" turned into way too many parts. XDDD )
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Date: 2011-10-07 01:52 pm (UTC)But - but the wailing across the country as the Sun Knight does not conform to what 'everyone knows'!
"I have 4 bullet points left. Though that doesn't include the conclusion. XD;"
eeeeeeeeeeee! \o/ (haha, I thought I was going overboard when I said fifteen parts. XDDD)
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Date: 2011-10-08 06:53 am (UTC)Haha...ha. 15 parts... (you meant 15 parts in all?) Let's hope I don't end up writing another 15 parts. I was thinking 25k or so would be enough for this story. XD; I spent all these words just retelling one chapter's worth of events. XDDD;; Of course, things happened a little quicker here, so that makes a difference. Hopefully. XD
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Date: 2011-10-09 08:13 pm (UTC)Oh! :O I hadn't taken proper notice of that! XDD Then, uh...I really have no idea why he keeps that long. Such a pain to maintain! It's better for his appearance? Doesn't want to be mistaken for his teacher? XD;;;; I guess long swishy hair looks cooler when you're fighting.
It also helps to hide the expressions you don't want other people to see"Haha...ha. 15 parts... (you meant 15 parts in all?)"
Yeah, I thought this would be finished in 15 parts. XD
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Date: 2011-10-05 07:52 pm (UTC)Good luck good luck on the story! How much more do you think you have left to write? I hope to start reading sometime soon because I have slightly less distractions now.
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Date: 2011-10-06 12:15 am (UTC)Hm, I am actually not sure. My plans have changed a lot, but there should be at least six more parts. Whether the story ends there or whether there'll be more, I have no idea yet. You seem to stick to your outlines pretty well? :3 I seem to have gotten to the part where each chapter is growing larger than my plans (my aim was for around 1,200 words per part) but I can't seem to fit what needs to happen within that word limit. Now my aim is... over 1k, less than 2k per section. XD;
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Date: 2011-10-06 02:45 am (UTC)Yanagi is my solution to almost everything. If something can't be solved w/ probable means, there's Yanagi. And I always attribute it to him reading it in some book or just trying it out and it happens to work. Hooray for scholarly sages!! XD
I've only ever done two outlines and I've followed them quite exactly. The PoT/FE especially since every chapter is named and sorted in a specific order.
Although I may have to bump one of Sanada's chapters to a different location because I need Yanagi to be present and where it is right now, he wouldn't beI think I'd get lost in my story or forget something important if I didn't follow it and leave notes explaining what needs to happen and when. The creativity comes in on how the major events and happenings occur (especially when they have to discuss Seigaku... having a meeting in the meeting room each time would be boring lol). The symbolism and dialogue and metaphors and whatnot typically accidentally pop up... and then work out perfectly later.Ah, between 1-2K is a nice comfortable place to be. I started around there too, but I'm in the 3,000-7,000 range now (the Niou chapters always end up being the longest... probably because he's missing most of the time and really strong relationship development takes place in his chapters).
Good luck with the rest of the fic! I read over Part 13 actually and it's really interesting! First person, which I've never really read much of. And the flow is nice between forward progress and describing detail. Nice word choice too! :D
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Date: 2011-10-06 03:30 am (UTC)Hah, that is a good solution. As long as he can find out from a book, nothing much is improbable to explain away.
Ahhh, I'm very in awe of your ability to plan so far ahead and to follow that so exactly. I usually don't plan too far ahead and just have a general idea of what's going to happen, but my plans usually change a lot. I suppose this is why I can never manage complicated plots! I love it when symbolism and dialogue come out of nowhere and then seem to fit so perfectly. :D
Yup, I like writing short chapters. It is definitely a comfortable place to be. Usually when I attempt longer fics, my chapters are always around that length, with them growing to 2k~3k or so later on in the story. 3k~7k per chapter would be such a challenge for me! I only usually reach that length with oneshots, since I need to conclude the story within that one part. :3 I can see why Niou's chapters might end up the longest! Lot to cover, eh?
Hopefully I can continue writing this to the end without stopping for a ridiculous amount of time! My aim is to finish this month! \o/ Haha, you read part 13 out of the blue? XD; I've been mostly writing in third person, but when I first started writing fanfic, I did it in first person. Returning to first person here has been pretty interesting...(I mostly wanted to avoid troubles with names since they've switched bodies) Writing 1st person has also made it so that I've accidentally slipped into writing first person when I was trying to write third person with another fic, haha.
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Date: 2011-10-06 04:46 am (UTC)I'm one of those people who definitely works so much better knowing the final destination and then logically sequencing how they're going to get there. I spend a lot of time brainstorming events that could happen and determining what will be appropriate for hitting major plot points. I do a lot of thinking about setting, relationship development, if I'm going to tie something together or create a question....Act out scenes in my head so I can see if the characterization is right. So. much. thinking. It's my bedtime ritual - knocks me out pretty quickly too!
Writing muses are so helpful! Especially when they shower you in symbolism and witticism!
I'm a bit of an overly detailed person so that's how I get up to such a high word count. Since I tend to do the majority of my stuff handwritten first (hooray substitute teaching and planning hours) and then type them, I end up adding tons of detail in the transition process to give it balance.
Lots to cover currently because he's a bit of an enigma to everyone else (well, they haven't met him yet), but certainly to Yagyuu. The focus will shift when he joins though because there's the whole Yanagi's past and Sanada's past to get into. Niou also has a very interesting character background (to me) and my Platinum Pair support helps me with ideas!! :D
I LOVE reading things out of order! It was only a matter of time before I gave into the temptation. It's more of the "I need to know what happens so I can go back and see what was used to lead to that point". Like Harry Potter... I NEEDED TO KNOW WHO DIED because of all the suspenseful hype XD
That is an ingenious idea for the body switch to write in first person! *applauds* I wish you the best of luck in reaching your goal - you can do it! *cheers you on* I will proclaim to the world of LJ when I actually get Ch. 14 done... yes, the one i started on July 26th and is writer's block like no other.
Ps - Seen my FE! Atobe and Oshitari post? Thought you'd enjoy it! :)
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Date: 2011-10-07 05:45 am (UTC)I tend to think of oneshot ideas... that turn out into multi-chapter fics... I don't really like it when that happens, since it usually means I won't be able to finish the story! Don't have enough willpower to finish the story before I get distracted by some other story thread or by RL...
Nice, nice. The times when I do know a later scene and have to plan how to get there are always tough! And then I despair at how much needs to happen before that scene can happen. :'D
Haha, I think about my stories before bed... doesn't work very well. I end up not being able to fall asleep, so I get up and scribble my ideas down instead. :'D
Ah right, since you're substituting for middle & high school, you have a prep hour, right? I'm pretty much always on my feet for elementary school! Never a moment of rest. XD; I've never been able to write at work. I'm pretty bad at writing on paper too... I've been doing that for this fic, but it's mostly just snatches of scenes that are all jumbled up.
I so need to catch up with your story to see all that you're talking about. XDD I totally thought Niou would have joined everyone by now!
Ahhh, reading things out of order. =P I find that difficult. I'd get lost. What, you read Harry Potter out of order??
Haha, I started a story in July... it's still not done. *cheers you on*
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Date: 2011-10-07 06:41 pm (UTC)I have a hard time writing oneshota in general lol! I was amazed I issued out as many as I did before I started on this story. The outline thing for me forces me to finish the story... If I get distracted by real life or Photoshop, then I know where I left off and need to go. Must stay focused.
I completely underratand what you mean about planning how they're going to get there. Setting up battle strategy is such a pain right now. I know what needs to happen, but I have to gather the troops, make one or two speeches, explain the terrain, get them to their actual battle... Before they actually can fight. And for some of them, background history needs to be dropped at certain points. Ahhhh!!!!
I get knocked out almost instantly if I imagine deep conversation in my head XD Must be too much for my poor exhausted brain to comprehend.
Hooray for prep hours! And today, I subbed for a HS social studies teacher that just assigned book questions and the kids were well-behaved so I just wrote through those too! Most of the time though, I do have to teach the simple things they leave or go all out with math (strongest subject so I can help the kids). I did 1st-4th last Friday (teachers were rotating for meetings) so that was interstingly fun. And on Wed, I got super lucky and filled in for my old MS band director and got to teach a HS band and the 5th grade trombones :) The MS rehearsals were covered by the other directors because they didnt know it was me who got the last minute sub job XD
Writing on paper is sloooow but it gives me something to do at school lol.
Niou is a rebel. He takes forever to join lol. Marui and Jackal and Kirihara kind of get forced in around the same time lol.
3rd to see what was up and it was the most recent out. The 4th, 1st, and 2nd. I looked to see who died in the 5th before finding a chapter with a lot of Snape and read forward from there. And then went backwards a chapter at a time from where I orginlnallh started. That was really confusing lol! I more or less did that with the sixth, but I forced myself to read the 7th properly.
Most of the time, if I am unsure about a series, I will pick one around the middle and read it before starting from the first volume. And if something suspenseful major happens that has something to do with one of my favs, I will spoil myself and check.
PoT is the other one that I watched/read very out of order - favorite player matches first haha. Because I am conscientious about time. I also like the challenge of attempting to logically sequence things. I am crazy lol.
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Date: 2011-10-08 05:42 am (UTC)Ahhh, so much you have to write with just setting up! I'd probably skip a few steps along the way, haha. Sounds like a lot of groundwork to lay.
Ah, nice that the kids were well behaved so you could write while they did their work. :) I find that even when the kids are doing silent work (like silent reading), I expect myself to keep an eye on them the entire time, so thirty minutes of reading for them turns into an eternity for me (where I just think to myself, I wish I could be reading just like you guys!). What do you mean by 1st - 4th? You substituted for those periods...for different teachers? Oh, how neat to substitute for your old MS band director! Were the other teachers expecting substitutes to lead the students? I wonder how much teachers expect substitutes to teach with these more specialized subjects.
Ahhh, hm, the third books a good place to start with HP though, in my opinion. (since I really liked that book) Haha, with your order, you had teenagers who progressively got younger! They feel so young in book 1 now. I read them all in order. I wouldn't be able to read them out of order. =P Though I think HP lends to reading out of order better than most series since it's very formulaic with the school year.
I find I spend more time on a series than I would've if I just started with it from the beginning. XD; Since if I get back to an episode or a part I've already read or watched... I'd watch it again. XD;
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Date: 2011-10-08 03:22 pm (UTC)I really just want the actual battle to follow as thus...
Sanada used Urvan. Critical hit!
Exp. gain +100
Level Up! (Da duh duh daaaaaaa!)
+1 HP, +1STR, +1SPD, +1 DEF
Axe Level Up!
Also, only weapons blessed by the goddess can penetrate Sanada's armor. (But wait? Isn't Sanada using Hector's body? Shhhh, don't mind the little details... :D They can also use Rewarp staffs and they're not even magic users)
I looked up like every other two minutes just to make sure. If they were in Middle school or younger (or at a rougher school district), I would have totally been walking around checking up on them. It's easier to watch when writing than reading for me - I can write without looking at the paper most of the time lol.
Oops, sorry, I meant 1st-4th grade in a day. So each hour was a different grade for me where I saw the teacher briefly before they went into their meeting. It was interesting to see where students are comparatively 'cause I don't remember anything about elementary school. The 1st grade teacher happened to be my brother's kindergarten teacher (who I have met before so she greeted me in her happy, enthusiastic way). The 3rd grade teacher was my brother's 3rd grade teacher, who I have never met before, but he was like "Do you happen to be Minh's sister?". How he could have guessed after 12 years of having him, I'm not sure, but he was a fantastic guy.
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Date: 2011-10-08 03:24 pm (UTC)I think if the teacher knows who they are going to get ('cause they can technically look through a list and pick), they will let that person teach if they can. So it surprising to me to see how many jobs I've had where they trusted a guest to teach (although it wasn't anything complicated). For my band directors, they've known me forever and they knew I was certified in music. If it was another sub, they team-teach everything so they would have just combined classes or pulled one out of marching band to cover the concert band.
Love the 3rd book! Still my fav :) Nice blend of light-hearted, but darker plot progression w/ some magical charm and humor. Whenever I see the first movie on TV, I'm like "Holy cow... they look younger than I remember!"
I don't think I've seen any series out of order except PoT. And I haven't watched many of the episodes I saw a long time ago again yet
'cause I still need to finish the seriesThe best way to describe how I watched PoT is...National OVAs (saw Fuji in Ep. 4) continued in order (while watching the regular series)
Started the regular series only watching the Fuji matches... and then met Tezuka and watched all his matches... Atobe!!!!... Hyotei... All-Star Camp... Rikkai... Filler episodes... Training Camp.. Other arcs... The beginning 10... ranking matches...
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Date: 2011-10-06 04:51 am (UTC)