[Legend of Sun Knight] fic: Bittersweet Sweetness Part 13

Title: Bittersweet Sweetness Part 13
Fandom: The Legend of Sun Knight
Words: 1,925
Summary: Instead of receiving a brooch that dresses him in an assassin's clothes, Sun receives a trinket that switches his consciousness around with Judgment's. Now, Judgment must find out the mystery behind the Death Knight in Sun's stead. Problem is, imitating Sun's poor swordsmanship is no easy feat, and who knew what Sun was doing with Judgment's body in the meantime? Alternate telling of the end of volume 1 of the novels.
Notes: Yup, I've slowed down with this fic. I thought I'd be able to finish it last month... complete miscalculation. Still quite a few more parts to go! Less than 400 words from 20k now. *watches each part grow out of hand*

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*coughs* Sun and Judgment bathing pics, manhua style. (also a cute Storm in the first pic!) Haha, seeing these made me go, "oh right, they probably don't have showers" so I changed my wording in the previous Judgment section to "bathing". I debated about the phrase "like a running faucet" since I'm not sure if they have faucets, but ehhh, I liked the phrase so I kept it...

Yu Wo had these posted in her plurk, but she reposted them here as an apology that manhua v3 will be delayed a little (something wrong with the barcode).

Sun's pic says, "A guy bathing is nothing to look at!"
Judgment's pic says, "Assassin?"

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Veline, added scene

Hm, I should start planning for NaNo. Not sure what I want to do yet... I thought I'd continue where I left off last year since that story is still hanging and I do want to finish the story, but there are so many flaws in the story and its premise that I wonder if I should even continue it. :'D I truly felt like I was RPing with myself in writing the story with alternating POVs, and I despair that none of the female characters have a prominent role yet.

When I went through with editing what I had last year to print the first part as a book, I tweaked some phrases to have them make more sense in the long run, and I added a scene that should bridge events better so that things don't come out of nowhere (which meant I had to tweak the wording of the scene before and after this since this was an added scene!). I haven't posted the edited chapters and probably won't, so with current wording, this scene doesn't fit at all... but here's the added scene. With blatant foreshadowing. XD; Or maybe I should just go through and post edited versions in the old posts even though I have chapters divided differently... or... nah. I'll just leave it. XD; This is an extra scene added in Part 7. Instead of leaving right away, Rykatu goes on a detour. This is labeled as chapter 10 in the edited version.

( 2010 NaNoWriMo added scene )

I am veeery tempted to start over from scratch. But the question would be... would the story turn out any better in its execution? Probably not... maybe I should go and edit what I have of Part 2 so far so that I don't meander farther and farther off track...

Hm, I really wanted this to be young adult, but I failed right away when my characters weren't even adolescents. A rewrite is looking more and more alluring. With me trying to stick to one POV, or at least not do alternating POVs in such a systematic order. I don't need to show their reactions to every single thing! *thinks about it* Haha...I would fail so hard.